Its beautiful in parts .i loved the overall "images" it creates....There is definitely depth in several parts of ur writing.
There were few areas i found , where this story can be improved further. i find it a bit "sketchy"..which means that you jumped to the next sequence too quickly and didnt take ur sweet time to let the story unfold itself. Example: when she first meets the guy, the very same paragraph talks about his family accepting her and so on...there was no time given to let the romance build up and therefore the reader does not feel the depth that you are feeling as the author...
Yet it touched me in several portions ...Keep it up :)
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