I'm absolutely a sucker for a meta piece of work. A writing.com contest entry about writing a writing.com contest entry is definitely something I'm a large fan of. The way it's written is very casual and given the subject matter it works very nicely!
My only tip would be not to rush your story too much. Towards the beginning there is a bit of a feeling that the story genres are packed in so you can focus on the rest of the story, but don't be afraid to have something a little longer so that the challenge fulfillments can feel a little more natural.
The language in the piece lends fantastically to painting the majesty that is autumn in some parts of the world. As someone who loves to walk through a forest when it's all orange and just behind being frosty it's very nice to see someone putting that beauty into language so nicely.
The fact it took me several readings to fully understand what was being presented is both a blessing and a curse. It somewhat reads as a joke the first time or two, and past that it became much more clear what was being conveyed. With such heavy restrictions to things such as attempting the structure you did I can completely understand that sort of outcome, though the idea you were trying to put forth is both agreeable and commendable.
Simplistic language also did this piece well! All in all very well done!
An absolutely beautiful piece! Such a complex subject is absolutely beautifully presented here, and I applaud you're ability to keep things so short. Over lengthening a poem is a dangerous gambit and you were able to perfectly stick to being succinct and to the point about such a packed idea.
Very well done poem!
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