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18 Public Reviews Given
18 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Will look mainly at story line and potential, as opposed to grammar etc. Additionally I will look at characters and plot.
I'm good at...
Noticing when parts of plot do not quite make sense, or perhaps when a character contradicts itself etc.
Favorite Genres
Fantasy, adventure, horror
Least Favorite Genres
None
Favorite Item Types
Static, story, novel, fiction
Least Favorite Item Types
Article, report
I will not review...
I will review everything, however with less experience on articles and reports.
Public Reviews
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Review by EllisRosser Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I hate to say it because it isn't a laughing matter, but I found reading this hilarious!! Either way, this could make a great scene for a comedy, or a full on drama on how the boy deals with being a girl!! It was very entertaining to read, as well as the first chapter that I didn't review but still read!! It leads on nicely, skipping the 6 months of his coma and leads straight on into the story, which I liked!! Well done I am genuinely intrigued :)
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Review of My Chains  Open in new Window.
Review by EllisRosser Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I've made it my intention to read as much poetry as I can at the moment as I've started releasing a lot of my own work, I must say your piece is really great!! The structure is simple and quite unique, and I like poetry like this because it has a deep meaning, it allows you to think about society in varying ways and I hope that's what you intended because it definitely made me think! Well done, I really like it :) And Merry Christmas!!
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Review by EllisRosser Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a really sweet story, and it's good to know Niklas cares for his sister in any way there is, and he'll protect her as it is his 'duty.' I really like the sentiment behind the story, and I have a friend with autism, he just got his first job and is doing really, really well there! :) It's really nice that you would write pieces such as this, bringing support to disabilities and I commend you! Just to finish off, in the third to last paragraph, I don't think coach asked him a question saying 'Very inappropriate behavior,' it's more of statement? Also, in the second to last paragraph you wrote whether like 'wither' :) (Easy typo to make) Apart from these, I really like the story, well done and Merry Christmas!! :)
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Review by EllisRosser Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I have to be honest, I really like it actually, I find myself actually getting into poetry (suprisingly!) This is really good, the repetition is catchy and I could image myself singing sea shanty aha! There's also a nice story behind the poem, can't beat a nice bit of love! :)
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Review by EllisRosser Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I usually dislike poetry, but like the poem I just read before this one, I find myself, despite the content oddly calmed by the nature of it. The contents is relevant to what some experience throughout their lives and it really emphases the fragile nature of love. When we consider love, it's hard to contemplate what it means for each person, but we can take belief that for each person, there are different struggles. So thanks for this great poem, made me remember how lucky I am :)
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Review of Unworthy  Open in new Window.
Review by EllisRosser Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This story has a great start, it really intrigued me to find out what was going on, and the decider sounds scary as hell, but throughout the story it was good and kept me interested. Additionally, I thought there was a good balance of description and speech, so keep it up I really enjoyed it! If you could possibly review my work too that would be great, cheers :)
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Review of Cleric's Revenge  Open in new Window.
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Review by EllisRosser Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
That was amazing, I really, really like the storyline so far! Just like you (I assume) I love any story with magic and fantasy, it really lets you escape and this is what your story allowed me to do. I much preferred the last 3 quarters to the first quarter and the reason for this is that in the first quarter there were so many simple, short sentences that it cut the flow. Perhaps you were trying to add suspense which of course it did, but I feel some could be taken out because it did for me personally, make a non flowing start. But after that it was absolutely great and I loved it! If you could please review my work 'The Gift of Revenge' it's magic too :)
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Review by EllisRosser Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
That was really good, I really liked how it made you feel as if the character was in trouble in terms of burning himself, and then you realise he's a fireman! The rhyming couplets are also great, and the structure is neat and tidy. However, perhaps you could consider making the paragraphs varying lengths which could symbolize the uncontrollable and haphazard fire, and perhaps how the fire is messy. (Just a thought, but really well done!!)
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