I read the first few lines and already became lost. The perspective is garbled, jumping from first to second to third person unreasonably and half the clauses in the sentences don't even make sense. A poor effort, at least sort your English before trying to tell a story.
Probably should have read this one before Vol. 3. I honestly find it difficult to find works quite as... Shall we say... Honest about themselves. This website tends to deck with mainly fanfiction, but this story seems very serious about itself. Amongst its various shortcomings in its plot, I respect its tenacity and will written English.
Some good writing, but falls down to the shortcomings that many interactive stories do. There is a severe lack of content which ruins the experience of the story. There are tense changes, perspective changes ie. from third to first person and it ultimately disjoints the writing. A shame.
I don't think I've seen an interactive story quite so detailed on each chapter. This story offers many choices surrounding expansion fetishes, in great detail and exuberance. The only thing this would benefit from is more continuations of each story path.
This is truly one of the best interactive weight gain stories I have come across on this site. The vast quantity of choices and material this work now offers wets one's tastebuds (and elsewhere...) for more as it is well written and is quite fulfilling in providing what you wish to read. Love it.
Disappointing. I followed this under the pretense that it was of the Vore category but this cannot be considered this, but rather this is mere consumer cannibalism. However, this piece is well written, even with my disappointment of content, which would not be a good enough reason to call this bad writing.
I wish not to say too much about this piece for fear of taking away from one's first read of this piece. However what I will say is that it is intriguing in concept and execution, and truly very will written. A great piece of poetry exploring the broken mind.
I love the structure of this piece. It comes across as if it is someone is being bombardedby their own thoughts, feeling scared, almost rambling as if being driven insane by the deep thoughts being discussed in this poem.
The poem provides great criticism over our moral views surrounding sex and procreation, and it's conflicts with religion, namely Christianity, and provides the account of one who is fed up of the contradictions.
I thoroughly enjoyed this story, as it is very diverse in its approaches to the main character gaining weight. There are many routes written in reach path allowing for you to truly receive a personalized experience. Some situations are realistic whilst others are fantastical and extraordinary, meaning there is something for everyone who has come here to satiate their unique tastes.
The main thing this story lacks however is the use of good grammar and/or structure, probably due to the vast number of chapters available.
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