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Review of Instead  
Review by RDLer
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
Good, get rid of the and's as well as the buts and you will have a better, more emotional short. Also I believe you meant to say consciousness rather than conscientiousness. Since conscientiousness is a personality trait. I sort of lost track of what is happening in this story as well, this person's still alive but what happened? Its far too ambiguous only giving us the sense of a tragic event happening and the hospital being involved. Initially the story starts with the sense of a bad ending but in the end it turns around? Like I said, its good because there is clear motivation and passion behind the fixable mistakes but be more descriptive and clarify the chain of events more clearly.
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Review of Kitty  
Review by RDLer
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Fantastic read. Your writing style allowed me to picture the images so vividly while looking upon my white screen. The story felt to me like an old Goosebumps episode and I have to say I wanted more without being disappointed. Great story and keep writing.
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Review of Aftershock  
Review by RDLer
Rated: E | (4.5)
A sad story of a parent losing a child, very emotional words elicited a very vivid image of a woman lying in bed with an open terrace behind her. From that terrace I could hear the funeral bells ringing. Very good poem, its realistic qualities as well as the strong imagery are worthy of the rating.
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Review by RDLer
Rated: E | (4.0)
A romantic chill went down my back as as she gave into her love and called Garret. The dance seen was vivid and descriptive enough to allow me to go there with them. Reading stories like this one allows for us to contemplate the truest feelings we have for those were afraid to confront. The fear of just being friends as described in your writing is all to true. Loves hardest to see through the smoke we create for ourselves. Many thanks and keep writing.
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Review of Eye Contact  
Review by RDLer
Rated: E | (3.5)
My imagination went straight to the first moment you see that person from across the room and know there's instantaneous attraction. The language spoken and the words used to express this emotional event seemed to be cut short but overall it still elicited what I believe the author wanted to provoke in the reader. Well done. Keep writing and don't restrict yourself.
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