I liked this poem overall, but I really didn't like the first four lines. I understand that they are imitating the noise of rain, but I think it was cheesy and took away from how nice the wording of the rest of the poem is. I really love the line: "Seeking, striving, struggling, unfurling all its being"
I really enjoyed this poem, however I didn't really like the rhyming lines. The poem was intended to be dark, and intense, but the rhyming took away from the seriousness of the poem, made it seem amateur. I also do not like the use of "'til", it seems to informal and isn't consistent with the poem's meaning.
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