I enjoyed this chapter, as there was a genuine attempt to advance the plot, and not simply add a couple more options to the story. However the spelling is terrible, and detracts from the story believe not beleave, cort rather than court, i rather than I, sorcceres in place of sorceress. We can all make typos, I know I still make them. But there is a spelling checker in place, so there is no reason to leave anything underlined which isn't a name. I must confess I still use British spellings as I am Scottish, but obviously American English is what the spell-checker looks for and I love that too.
I would suggest reading it through, even just once to see if it still makes sense. I know I edit sentences in the middle once I have finished typing, and need to adjust them too.
This is a review not just of this three word chapter but also for the first few levels. I apologize if that is presumptuous. But they are simply all too short. Even if there were a a brief description, of the captain pacing with a worried look on his face. The options are varied but again introduced without any context. Anyone writing in this fiction would know the range of things that can go wrong in the Star Trek universe. Hope this is helpful.
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