Hello Thelyrical,
I found your poem very nicely conveys the message. They do indeed have too much power. I can feel the the heartbreak of the families as well as the the writers. I actually had two lines that were my favourite because they really captured all the heart ache. "Is it child protection or maybe child abuse?" and "As the kid with no mummy forgets how to smile,". I think the last one is the line that brings your poem together very nicely. I don't think there's anything to fix in the poem. maybe typos here though: "Way too much power stacked up on he shelf," did you mean his shelf? "Bo room for human error,no room for mistake," No room for human? Other than that I found this poem a lovely read. Thank you.
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