I do believe there is a message in this piece about trying not to forget the hopefulness of childhood, but it’s a little muddled by the multiple repeated lines.
Don’t get me wrong, I am in no way a professional. And I do believe repeating some lines can work, if done in moderation. But there are a couple too many.
The message I can decipher in this piece is a very interesting one, and I like it a lot, but the repeated lines make it a little less clear in my mind.
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