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Poetry, shorter stuff. I'm mostly blind. I react and encourage with my reviews, suggest direction to make something better. I can be a friend. Trust went out the window. I break the conventional fourth wall. Not sure what it means? Ask.
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nature, love, psychological, spiritual, inspirational, epiphany, emotional, drama, human interest, science, conspiracy, dystopian, fatalistic, speculative. Not cookie cutter fantasy realms or choose your adventure. Action/adventure. Unique, surprise.
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Horror, fan fiction, some fantasy and sci-fi, or anything Lord of the Rings/Game of Thrones-ish.
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poetry, short story, essay/opinion/blog
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Review of SMALL AM I  
Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: E | (4.5)
Being a parent of two small children this poem gives me chills to think my own could be subjected to such conditions. Small Am I is a very apt title. It's sad that voice sees little more redemption that the sweet release of death. But it is honest and true and an unfortunate circumstance facing too many little ones we cannot protect.

Brian

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review of Evergreen  
Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: E | (3.5)
I came across this poem in the newbie forum. At first, I thought is was the poem I listed by the same title. So I had to stop in and check it out.
You have some beautiful imagery and nice connection to love of nature (what I like best). Noticed a few punctuation and spelling errors. I get emails from people who don't like me capitalizing the first letter of every line because some don't start a sentence. Wasn't listed as poetry. I always miss that little pull down bar under brief description to select genre.
Keep on writing. Hope you come by and check out my poem:
STATIC
The Evergreen  (E)
God gives what man destroys, then God gives...
#1149934 by Brian K Compton


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Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: E | (4.5)
I can feel your loss in this poem, Aamie. To be so vivid and show such thoughtful candor in this ode is astounding. You truly exhibit strength as an individual and a poet. Your poem puts me there and lets me live through all the moments. Beautifully done and your sister no doubt would be proud. Someday, I'll have to share the eulogy I wrote for my mother and the experience I had reading it before my Dad and brothers.
God bless,
Brian
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Review of Majesty  
Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: E | (4.5)
Beautiful imagery and the language flows so smoothly. It was pleasant to read.
Favorite line -- "Odious ocean unwieldy, wild
waiting to capture my tender child." It captures the parent feelings wonderfully.
If could make one suggestion, flip flop lines three and four. I was thrown off by the salt water reference before I saw where it was going. This way the reader won't hesitate as the poem draws the reader in.
Excellent work!
Brian

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Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: E | (4.0)
I can relate to having a personal attachment to a piece of writing that I will never change because of the profound experience creating and connecting with the words brings me.
Having said that, I also like to pursue other versions of the piece. If it was written 10 years ago, then I would try to update it with "What does it mean to be me 2006" or "10 years later." Could start by putting yourself in the same place and carrying yourself forward to now. Follow that rainbow, follow the clouds in the sky and see where they take you.
It's a fine poem on its own, but could serve as a muse for future works to come.

Continued success and keep reaching for those rainbows,
Brian
I saw your request for a review and had to comment. As for style, I'm not an expert. But I see some advantages to editing this piece to give it a smoother read. If I might be so bold, here is how I would revise first stanza:

A rose’s beauty is in its petals --
color so bright,
fragrance so lovely.

But as time passes,
those petals fall.
Revealing the empty within.

Only the steadfast are true --
Withered leaves, green stem,
the prickled thorns of pain.

A rose’s beauty is temporary --
Faded, decayed,
but not in vain.

And that could stand alone as the poem, or explore further.
I corrected some punctuation. Hope this has been helpful. I encourage you to rate and review my work, especially "Garden Waste," which you might like.

Brian

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review of Your Fault  
Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the repitition of "I always want what I cant have" and the voice that is trying to extract itself from YOU, but is hung up on rejection, if I'm reading correctly.
I saw two lines that had 'You' instead of 'YOU.' 7th line and 7th line from the bottom. Noticed for the most part poem went without punctuation -- spotted 'I'm' twice on line 16.
Although acerbic, there is tongue-in-cheek, as well. I like the feeling of mixed emotion, how to deal with someone or something you can't change or master.
The line "My love for You will last longer than my veins" strikes me best.
Keep Writing!
Brian
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Review of Reflecting  
Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: E | (4.0)
Profound feelings about how a connection with the world can affect the human condition. Like the mood and undertones and feel of where this takes place.
Some things seem unanswered for me like "hard for me to stay," or wondering about our existance.
Maybe a different title for poem? There is reflection but what the voice is talking about is stronger. Focus and build on the emotion because it drives this poem. This poem is one that I'm sure many will connect with.
Write On!
Brian
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Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I get chills reading this. My grandpa was killed by a train over 40 years ago in a similar way. They say he couldn't hear the train.
Very powerful images in this poem and it opens strong. I like "her anger spits at the end of a knife." At first I thought I read splits which would have been powerful too.
Got tripped up by 'night or spirits.'
Your list starting with the van works well. Could it be punctuated differently and have the motorbike either removed or moved up so it could end with stonger words 'eagle and hawk.'
Moon, diesel, whistle, Jeannie, tracks ties together nicely.
Perhaps remove And to make "The full moon..."
Very nicely done.
Brian
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