my first reaction was "MORE MORE WHERE IS THE REST OF IT?".
Grammar is nice, and no mistakes could be found.
The storyline is great. i hope this is a series and not a stand alone, ecasue thta would be dissapointing. i would love to see what happened to the boy/wolf/werewolf.
This is beautiful. it begins with the chareter in his dull, repetitive day doing nothing but the same thing. then the lady comes into play, and in the end she changes his outlook.
The grammar was neat and no errors could be found.
the message was clear, about how a simple thing can change someones outlook. it nearly made me cry.
this is great. the metaphors, the setup, all of it.
i couldn't find any grammar mistakes, but thats beside the point.
this is amazing in so many ways. the description of how he made you feel, the way you said you forgot who you really were, and the ending especially was moving.
5/5
this is a great poem. of course, i would rather someone not have to write a poem about them being depressed because depression sucks (i know first hand). i like how you, or whoever this is anyway, cant remember what you were doing before you sorta woke up. and the part where you remember everything was deep. then, at the end when you say your heart died with her, that was pure poetry at its finest, because its pure truth. 5/5
Great! a few spelling problems, but of course this is only the first few chapters.
I love how the people are so life like, and your idiot PhD is hilarious. the plot is great, and i hope it will continue to be this good. i hope you don't stop, and that your stranger gets killed at some point
aww, butterfly's! this is good though,like saying butterfly's are the answer to word peace. no mistakes found and nice imagery, so all in all keep it up
I always enjoy a story with a good dose of crazy. 5 stars for the crazy, and the lack of any findable mistakes. have you ever been in one of those places? i haven't, but Ive read about them. used to get called crazy all the time, so i researched them. i never believed i would go to any myself, talking to people who arnt there isn't crazy, right?
I don't really want to review this, its too close to my heart, but i feel i have too, for the people ive lost. my grandma? she had colon cancer. she died at about 97. but she was so strong before it took her, she didnt even need anyone around to help her. my uncle? only just 40, brain tumor. he died on my nana's couch, and the sad part is, he wasn't even related to us, and we did what his family couldn't. my mom is being checked out right now, we dont know yet. im proud of those people, and im glad to hear that its possible to overcome.
don't get me wrong, this was good. its just the way it seems to move, too quickly. you seem to jump from one place to another. would really be great after that though, so keep writing!
i pray that all of these arnt life experiences. i know i couldn't stand to see a woman i loved doing the same to another man. loveing him the way she used to love me. the way she would leave me in the dust. i cant write anymore, these just seem so sad
Hard to read and full of grammar mistakes. A great try but it just read weird, i really cant explain. Anyway practice makes perfect so don't stop trying
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