The majority of these chapters and choices are really great, but I just got to choice 12231221221, and I am utterly disappointed with what asdf wrote. I was getting really excited for Hajime and Mikan to be acting like each other and the mishaps that may happen, but you just skipped through all of it. Though, I guess I have to give you some props for above-average writing, but that's the only good thing about this chapter. At least it wasn't like the Akane one where it was full of gibberish and horniness by the writer. This is still bothering me and my week has been completely ruined. Every single chapter leading to this point was extremely good and you could've maybe added a choice to let Hajime sleep through breakfast or get up, might've let me rest in peace. But in all honesty asdf, you've tried your best, this was all you could do and that's alright, just make sure to think of adding choices where choices can be made, please.
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