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Review by Greyjay Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there,

This is great fun. i love the narrative / subject conversation, it overtakes what could be a story of some sort an produces some great banter.

I think that this could be a good formula for a much wider story with interspersed arguments and plot twists. I also think that you could use the narrative voice to confuse other charachters in a bigger story, you could have some real fun with this.

I think this could have been a little longer, it stops just short of an rounded ending, I think that means I want more!.

Jay
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Review by Greyjay Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is great, plenty of graphic description without being over the top.

I want more!

It has a Stephen King feel to it, which is a good thing, I also feel there is lots of scope to expand it - should you so wish.

Great stuff.

Jay
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Review by Greyjay Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love Monty Python style banter (funny man, straight man) thing you have going on. I also love the silliness of it. I particularly like the way we are introduced to the baffoon of a knight and the fact that all but the squire are oblivious to the fact that he's a berk!

Great fun.

Jay....

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