A beautiful short touching love story. I enjoyed the discussion and the narration was gripping and interesting through the end. I love the below sentence the most in the story. "She paused, lightly grazing her fingers over the glass, following the lines of raindrops that slid down the pane"
Besides , i felt that the word "No" is redundant in the dialogue “No, you are my good friend, and always will be. That’s all, and nothing more". Because she had already made it clear by exclaiming "No, of course not!" in the preceding dialogue.
Good one! Gripping narration of events and vivid depiction. However i felt that the presentation and styling especially in terms of paragraphing should have been better. It could have been easily much refreshing for the reader if it is broken at logical points.Also, I didn't understand the reason for underlining few words.
The story is very simple yet beautiful. This proves how a simple writeup could make a good read. Looking forward to read more fascinating stories from you.
Nice one. You rendered ultimate philosophy in simple words. It is straight and unpretentious, even though you claimed the opposite. I feel a bit of poetic touch to it would have made it more reminiscing for the readers. Looking forward to read more of this kind from you.
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