I went to grade school with a guy like that. He was my aunt's neighbor and she adored him haha. He tried to get me wrapped around his finger more times than I can count, and I'll be the first to admit I fell for it several times (I never hooked up with him though; I like to think of myself as rational). They do give good ideas to write about with their poetic way with words, though. I really enjoyed this. There are a few punctuational errors (like the ellipsis in the eighth paragraph from the bottom. It should be inside the quotation) and word errors (for example, in the eleventh paragraph from the bottom you used "past" when it should be "passed"). Overall, it was great. I have a short attention span, generally, and I read it through without once thinking of stopping. I hope you got free lunch for the week. :)
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