I think this is the best poem I've read on this site so far since my membership started 2 days ago. I feel it. Anxiety in a room full of people and noises. A couple of the lines seem out of rhythm? but overall an enjoyable, believable, authentic piece.
Intriguing, thought and feeling provoking. I don't know much about poetry and have not reviewed many poems, however I will try. The beginning seems a little choppy then, about half way through the first paragraph a type of rhythm begins and I catch it. The final paragraph I feel like the line "On a repeat" doesn't quite fit "On repeat" might. thank you for this read.
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