WOW! Great Job at describing what you meant by novelty. I love the first line... children are a great example because they will want a specific toy, get it, play with for a little while and are then finished with it. Although you didn't use emotions perse, like for example: "I felt used when you broke me in" the way you described the whole scene like get me dirty, break me in, I can understand the pain in that. Great poem!!!
Interesting moment that I would mind to have continued reading if there were more. I love the details used throughout something I wish I could do better myself. You are able to learn alot about this character in such a short story, but I something were left unanswered and I am sure it was written like that for "dramatic effect" or for the art of this story, and maybe answers will come later in another piece. If not then I would re read and think of some questions a reader would have and try to answer those questions. But overall I love this story there were many emotions described.
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