Title:
Your title "
"The Legacy of Saint Patrick" " really caught my attention.
Rhythm & Flow:
I found the rhythm and flow very easy to follow and engaging.
Imagery & Emotions:
This tells the story of St. Patrick very well.
Conclusion:
I love the message of the poem. It stays on the prompt very well all the way through to the end from the beginning. When I read it out loud, it is a pleasant poem to read. It may just be me, but poems are kind of like music, and it doesn't sound as smooth to the ears as I would have liked it to. It is like sounding a sour note or two slightly off key. I don't know of a better way to explain it. It could just be the way my ears are hearing it. Overall it is a nice and pleasant poem.
My favorite line is:
“Jesus was restored to life on the third day,
but He restores lost souls, now, without having to wait."
Here are my suggestions for any changes that you might need to do; I only put the corrected versions in red.
1. He further stated,” The saving Lord
There should be a space between the end quote and The.
2. By that act, He became your sin
There should be a comma between act and He.
3. by His actions, He could offer you
There should be a comma between actions and He
I'm not sure how you feel about the changes, but if you read it out loud, it seems to have a better flow. I hope this helps you. I find this to be a great piece. Awesome job.
I want to thank you for sharing it with me and others here at WdC. It was an honor and pleasure to read it. See you around the halls of WdC.