Hi! this is Pheonix Blue, I liked the sense of truth you relay in these poems, they mean something that we can actually take from, not just ooshy gooshy types of poetry. (If that makes sense!) I write similar poetry myself. I'd like to see what you think of my stuff, great work, Keep writing!
Hi, this is Pheonix Blue, we were talking about something earlier. I liked hoein this story, it immediantly began. It wasn't a slow starting with charactors to explain. that made it much more interesting to read, One grammer check, when they are showing allen the photograph, She hands it over and says, "Here, it’s quite an old, so I hope you can help us." I thought instead of "its quite an old", you should put "its quite old". I enjoyed reading this, I'll keep reading!!
Hi, i thought your poem was interesting. Only thing i would change is, isnt wholes supposed to be holes? I was intriqued by how the disease was making you want blood and pain.
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