Wow, this is really good! I particularly love Orfeo because I just recently saw it and loved it! The mixing and playing upon emotions of both characters and audience is unreal. You did a fine of capturing the mystery of Euridice - whether she ever truly wanted to make it out and be with Orfeo, or stay where her problems would be lost. You never quite make the answer apparent, and that takes considerable skill. I loved your final simile about the rocks by the way. One suggestion: I would but Sing! in quotes ('"Sing!" I croaked.') since Euridice says it. It just looks awkward and reads incorrectly at first because of it as well. I would give you other suggestions as to what to fix, but I have found nothing. I can see exactly what's happening, and it all flows very nicely. I enjoyed reading this. You did a great job!
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