This is only my second review of a story. Grammatical errors aside, ( look I'm no expert when it comes to grammar, so don't take it too hard.) It's really a good story.
However you might want to consider how hearing Agatha was in the hospital made her feel, not just her action of running out. Perhaps the girl could sneak into the hospital out of concern. I mean the crying girl at the arboretum was kind of harsh. I got the impression that Kate is a caring person, just a little misdirected is all.
I did come away wanting to see Agatha and Kate's relationship blossom and deepen as she grows into a fine young woman.
Thanks a good read.
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