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Review of Jesus  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved this piece! The rhyme scheme really smooths the rythm and keeps an even flow. I liked your diction in this piece too. My favorite lines: "He repays me with his lyrical word,/Supreme and without a doubt superb,..." Keep writing!

Blessings,
True Blue
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Review of Dunes  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Fantastic job with this poem! I really liked your personification and imagery. My favorite lines: "Dunes resting on the desert floor/portray a constant image to the eye/belying the truth of their nature..." Well done, and keep writing your best!

Blessings,
True Blue
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Review of Wish  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Great job with this piece! You have a smooth flow and personification. The cliche of "wishing upon a star" is overused, but it fits well in your poem. My favorite lines: "I did./My wish came true./I have you." Well done, and keep writing your best!

Blessings,
True Blue
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Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Very nice. I really like your descriptions. You portray the characters very well. I especially liked the writing.com twist. *Bigsmile* My favorite line: "In fact, he gave Sara so many gift points, he needed to buy more..." Well done, and keep writing your best!

Blessings,
True Blue
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Review of Willowsong  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Great imagery and personification! This is a fantastic poem. The rhyming flows smoothly, and doesn't seem forced. My favorite lines: "pulsing through the supple whips that sing/of far off places they should visit,/tales of dreams the solar winds would bring..." Well done, and keep writing your best!

True Blue
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Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love Yellowstone! Fantastic job with this poem! You had great imagery, and I was reminded of my vacation there. Yellowstone is, by far, my favorite place on Earth! My favorite lines: "Snow glistens and brillant moonlight shines/While lustrous stars above twinkle and align..." You did have a typo. "Grizzly" doesn't have an "e". Well done, and keep writing your best!

True Blue
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Review of Moments  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice job with this poem! You had great personification and imagery. My favorite lines: "The scent of roses lingering in the breeze/Comfort to a weary soul..." Well done, and keep writing your best! Have a good holiday!

Blessings,
True Blue
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Review of The Raven  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good job with this piece!

I liked your occasional rhyme, which kept the poem fairly smooth. You also had great personification! My favorite lines: "When life has slowed and/Time has ceased/And death has drawn my breath..." I have no suggestions. Well done, and keep writing your best!

True Blue
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Review of Starship Sentry  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very Creative*Exclaim*

What I Liked...
*Note1*You were very imaginative and creative with this piece. You draw in your readers well.
*Note1*Nice ending. It was funny and unexpected.
*Note1*My favorite lines: "Souls were the multidimensional aspects of all beings, and human souls were as close to the Source as any being the Sentries had ever encountered..."


My Suggestions
*Balloon1*None.

Well done, and keep writing your best!


True Blue
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Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting Idea*Exclaim*

What I Liked...
*Note1*Your family history sounds interesting in itself. Your great grandmother seemed like a strong woman, the perfect heroine.
*Note1*I like how you plan on writing about your "dreams". It's a little cliche, but it seems to work.


My Suggestions
*Balloon1*You had a few punctuation mistakes. I think it would be helpful if you were to fully profread your piece. For example, you need a comma after "Istanbul" in the second paragraph.
Suggestion: Istanbul, Turkey

Well done, and keep writing!

True Blue
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Review of Destiny  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice Rhyming*Exclaim*

What I Liked...
*Note1*You seem to have great and encouraging motives for your readers. This poem is quite inspiring.
*Note1*I liked your consistent rhyming.
*Note1*My favorite lines: "Only you alone can pay the toll,/For dreams you hope come true!..."


My Suggestions
*Balloon1*Maybe some more similes, metaphors, or other poetry elements could brighten this up.

Well done, and keep writing your best!


True Blue
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Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Fantastic Personification*Exclaim*

What I Liked...
*Note1*I liked your metaphors and similes. I especially liked: "The light as silent as footfalls,..."
*Note1*Nice personification. My favorite lines: "Snowflakes/Glide listlessly/Through the wooden lace/Of the fingers of time;..."


My Suggestions
*Balloon1*None.

Well done, and keep writing your best!


True Blue
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Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Great Personification*exlcaim*

What I Liked...
*Note1*I liked the occasional rhyme, which helped maintain a smooth flow.
*Note1*Nice similes! My favorite example was also my favorite lines in your poem: "It sloshes like oceans, my psyche/In this time cycle measured by fear."
*Note1*Good personification!


My Suggestions
*Balloon1*None.

Fantastic job, and keep writing your best!


True Blue
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Review of Story Master  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Kudos for Creativity*Exclaim*

What I Liked...
*Note1*Nice rhyming and diction.
*Note1*I liked the "Convention Pirates} refrain.
*Note1*My favorite lines: "Every author I study and remember,From freezing January through December..."


My Suggestions
*Balloon1*Perfect spelling and grammar.
*Balloon1*None.

Fantastic job and keep writing your best!


True Blue
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Review of Forbidden  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hilarious Ending*Exclaim*

What I Liked...
*Note1*You used a great theme that love can be found in the most interesting places.
*Note1*I loved the ending! It was hilarious and unexpected. I was waiting for Henry to come to her and I laughed when I learned that it was her daydream.


My Suggestions
*Balloon1*None

Fantastic job, and keep writing your best!


True Blue
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Review of Iris  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Great Metaphor*Exclaim*

What I Liked...
*Note1*You had some good alliteration. I especially liked: "A fierce flash of blue..."
*Note1*My favorite lines were also a metaphor. "The ocean would overflow/And the salty water would drench his shoulder..."
*Note1*Good simile about "reading her like a book". It's a little cliche, but it fits well.


My Suggestions
*Balloon1*None

Fantastic job, and keep writing your best!


True Blue
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Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic job with this poem*Exclaim*

What I Liked...
*Note1*I loved your personification! The "raindrops prancing" is very creative, and it brings great imagery to the reader.
*Note1*Even though you don't have a set rhyme scheme, you still managed to write a nice poem.
*Note1*I loved your diction! Poetry requires the "perfect" words for a smooth flow, which you did beautifully.


My Suggestions
*Balloon1*None

Well done, and keep writing your best!


True Blue
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Review of Destiny? Doom!!!  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Fantastic job with this piece! You had great examples of alliteration and personification. I especially liked how each line began with "d". My favorite lines: "...dark, driving rain, distant thunder/droplets of darkness, devil's plunder..." Well done, and keep writing your best!

Blessings,

True Blue
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Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Thank you for writing such an inspiring piece! I really liked your motives for writing this, and it was truly beautiful. My favorite lines: "Make poverty history/Ensure that those 'buds' flower." Well done, and keep writing your best!

Blessings,

True Blue

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Review of Doublespeak  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow! I loved your metaphor and descriptions. My favorite lines: "...Of hate onto this deceiver’s head.
Doublespeak has left me for dead." Fantastic job, and keep writing your best! Have a great day!

Blessings,

True Blue

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Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Great job with this piece! I really liked your good rhyming and your personification. My favorite lines: "Until in anger my words I've poured.
'The pen is mightier than the sword'" Well done and keep writing your best!

Blessings,

True Blue
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Review of A Self  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Great job with your poem! You had fantastic diction and similes. As I said before, I think that punctuation could make this piece even better. My favorite lines: "each moment a star glistening in the existential universe where we dwell like gods creating our existence..." Well done and keep writing!

Blessings,

True Blue
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Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic job with this piece! I really liked your good humor and your analysis of the poets. *Wink* My favorite lines: "But Frost who persuades us to find roads less traveled, Is short, but the bunny trail’s hard to unravel." Well done and keep writing!

Blessings,

True Blue

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Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a fantastic poetic piece! I love your good diction and your personification. My favorite lines: "Secrets shared and carried on the wind, Restless spirits soar on the pure blue sky, Love lives forever and forever deepens." Well done and keep writing your best! Have a great day!

Blessings,

True Blue
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Review of Fifteen Horses  Open in new Window.
Review by True Blue Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi again Blue Thunder,

This is another good piece! I like your diction and personification, especially your "dancing prairie grass" line. You also have great descriptions, I can actually see the battle as it happened. Well done and write on!

Best wishes,

True Blue
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