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Rated: E | (3.5)
Nice one A.E...

Cute and funny, something you can recite to the kids at night *Wink* One suggestion though, the third stanza... Instead of "He then tiptoes up to me" it would flow better if you said "Then he tiptoes up to me". Altogether a really enjoyable poem!

Keep it up!
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