I loved this. It was erotic with out being crude or sex filled. It was also very romantic. You should definitely keep writing. Enjoy the rest of your week and have a very merry Christmas and happy new year.
Oh. My. Goodness. That sent my imagination whirling in ecstasy. I would read this story again and again. It was so erotic and deliciously dirty and utterly perfect. Definitely DO NOT stop writing. You could write a novel. If you ever write anything like this again please email. I would love to read another.
I know exactly how you feel. This really moved me and I think that it is perfect. No need to change a thing. I fear if you change it, it will lose its power and meaning. Thank you for sharing this I hope to write something as powerful as this someday.
I know exactly how that is. I have a puppy who makes that so hard to resist face. Right now she has taken over my bed. But she's a good dog. Anyway I loved the flow and rhyming of your poem. It also made me hungry. I'm thinking a low calorie snack is in order. I saw no flaws but I am curious. Why are some words bold and others not?
This was very interesting. It drew me in quicker than most short stories do with me. I loved how the sound changed a little each time. It kept the story from becoming predictable. I also loved how the sound did not stay in that apartment but followed him to the next one. It was almost like something Edgar Allen Poe would've written. You did a great job.
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