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Review of HEAVEN  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi again,

I would labeled this as prose. If you go back and categorize all your posts into the proper genres, you should get even more reviews by people looking for specific things to read.

I think this is another heartbreaking story. I see some rhyme scheme and wonder if you tweaked it a bit, if it could not be made into a very good poem. I see a lot of pain in your portfolio in regards to your posts. I would like to offer some (((mental hugz))). I hope days look brighter soon.

Just a note: your bio block is not set up. Why not tell us a little about yourself or why you joined WDC. You can put anything in there. It helps us to know you better, both as a writer and person.

This is you last review that kathySmile sent for you. I do still need you to mail me and tell me what siggy shop you would like to have your gift certificate sent to. I will be highlighting you entire port (since you are in need of reviews for all your stories) in my siggy for a week *Smile* I will mail you with the raffle tickets i will be buying for you. I hope you have enjoyed your gift.
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Review of Beloved Rose  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really hate to judge pieces like this as they are so personal and from the heart. i do not mind reviewing. I am saddened by this letter. I felt your pain. I could relate. I think this, in time, could be edited to make sure that all punctuation and capitalization is 'in place'. I understand you were venting and purging and I can appreciate the lack on polish.

Have you considered creating a blog? I think you need to have a paid membership. If you have any trouble buying one yourself, there are many groups that help with upgrades. mail me if you need me to find some for you.

I want you to know your post tore at my heart. I can only imagine your pain. I hope it lessens as time goes by.
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Review of Thank You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am not sure why there is auto-award on this piece. Is it just another way of saying thanks, doing yet another good deed?

You are truly such a selfless person. You seem to be constantly thinking of others around WDC, yet you humbly write a letter of thanks to those that have touched your heart. I think you are so very special. I am so glad to have 'met' you.

I would like to formally thank you now. I know words are just not enough to convey adequately how one feels when another soul comes and touches your heart, helps change your outlook, or just offers their friendship.

This letter was truly beautiful in sentiment. I do not like rating pieces like this (although of course in my book, it get a five star) because sentiments and heart-felt pieces like this can not be judged.

You give and give and i feel like i do not give back enough and probably never will. that is the great thing about friendship though, it is never balanced. One gives and the other receives and then you (if you are true friends) switch roles. Friendship is never fully reciprocated. to me, to fully reciprocate means that you are done, the dues have been paid, the 'bill' has been settled. Friendship is never-ending.

*Heart*
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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What a wonderful tribute to someone I know is one of your best friends. I think it is great that you two are Angel buddies, as you both are such angels. I think that you both work so well together, building each other up and helping each other through life's and WDC's trials.

The (is this an acrostic?) ABC definition of Mara's attributes describe her in a way that the reader feels they know her a lot better.

Congrats on the first place win. This is a heartfelt, beautiful tribute to friendship and to Mara
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Review of The Blue Mustang  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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This is a very short story but felt very complete. You write about what happens when we seek revenge. LOL The moral of the story is not about how wrong it is to seek revenge, rather the message is to make sure that you do not have a case of mistaken identity when delivering your revenge.

The story was well written and I had no problem following the story line or understanding and relating to the characters. You gave just the right amount of information on the twins to make me feel like I 'knew' them. The story line was great and a little humorous. The moral of the story was great and your use of a common phrase in delivering the moral of the story was also well done. Dialogue, spelling and grammar were nicely done.

The following Monday as Ingrid and Michelle were walking to class their friend Jill stopped to say hello.
I think this sentence could use some commas. I had to read it twice as I was a little confused without the comma breaks.

A very enjoyable read. i wonder what prompted this story. I think it was a great topic and unique. Thank you for sharing!
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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stopping to gaze and at the sunrise.
I do not think you want the word 'and' in this sentence

tell tail
telltale?

"Come back now. Come back in. It's nice and warm in here. Come on now. Come on."
I would separate any dialogue from the paragraph

After her death, I discovered I'm so numb, I barely noticed a person I lived next to for a month dieing.
After her death, I was so numb, I barely noticed the person I lived next to for a month was dying.

The fake "short" I established over the last several days yields the desired result.
I do not know what a 'short' is. I am not sure many readers would. You might want to explain what it is or use a different expression or description

Even people who are only here for short term care, are quickly depressed to tears.
There is no need for a comma in this sentence.

I'll never see anyone die beside me again!
Because this sentence stands on its own and because the person is either thinking this or actually saying it our loud, I would add quotes or put the sentence in italics.

The icy water could cause my, believe it or not, untimely death.
I would take out the 'believe it or not'. To me, that weakens the statement.

Apathy is my enemy, and I will not yield!
I love this sentence. It is full of emotion.

This is a good, yet sad story. I have pointed out what I found to need work in the first half of the story. I think you might want to examine the entire piece on your own and see if there are places that you can clean up. The story will have more impact when some changes are made in the sentence structuring. The story has great bones and an unique storyline.

The end was heartbreaking. I hope you work on this. If you do, please mail me if you make changes and I would be more than happy to come and read and rate it again.

Write on!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I think this is a terrific free-verse poem. You give thanks to the many things or people that make your life better and make you the person you are.

This would be a great poem anytime of the year. It really makes the reader think of the many things that they, themselves, have to be thankful for. reading this inspired me to write my own list. It is so easy to get caught up in the heartache or drama of your life that one forgets to be thankful for all the things that are positive.

Thank you for sharing this!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is a free-verse poem about spirituality and waiting for her Lord.

The use of simile is very well done in this poem. You limened the woman's waiting to many other things that have to wait for things that help them grow or prosper.

The last verse was very good in the word choices you used.

I really enjoyed this. Congrats on the win in Sherri's 'Coloring the world' contest *Smile*
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Review of That's What  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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I am not sure but it would appear this may have been inspired by something that actually happened? It was entertaining to read. It is dialogue only which I find hard to do without confusing the reader. Your dialogue did not confuse me. I do not know what is wrong with your nose or why he (she?) mentioned it...lol.

This was cute. thank you for sharing!




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Rated: E | (5.0)

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This was a really awesome, personal piece. I really appreciated your words. They were well written and easily understood.
I agree with you that there must be a balance of negative and positive...I just often see the scale tipping towards negative and it takes a lot of faith and love to keep those scales balanced. i think it is fabulous that your inner circle brings that love and positivity into your life and helps balance things out. I hope you see that rainbow soon.
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Review of Mara's Musings  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)

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Happy Anniversary Mara!

I enjoyed reading your blog. The image on top is lovely!

I wanted to comment on some of your entries.

We had one Christmas where money was extremely, extremely tight and we actually had to hold the holiday on New Years because that was the day i got my first paycheck after being out of work for a couple of months. I had to purchase many things from the thrift store and look for after Christmas sales. Thank Goodness, my oldest was into second hand-odd clothing. We received the turkey from my job and a friend came over and brought some extras. It was and still is my kids favorite Christmas. The felt the love and family togetherness that year. We still do tons of presents (habit) now that we can better afford it and start Christmas shopping for the next year the day after Christmas...but family is number 1 now. I am sure this year will be better for you and I am wishing only happiness and hugz for ya!

Richie Sambora was my teen (okay...adult too) crush! I never was into idolizing musicians or movie stars, but he made me hot. lol. The 'love' is dimming as he refuses to let go up that dippedidooed hairstyle. He is not aging like a grown man should, lol....but he is an awesome guitarist.

I loved reading your thoughts. Thanks for sharing them *Heart*






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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Oh! Very neat! I did not know that Rising Stars had a book club. I am low on funds this month to buy the book you all are reading and we do not have a book store here. I think I will definitely sign up next month. I would love to discuss what I read with others.

Okay, I just read Nicki's post about the library. I did not think about that. I shall call my library and see if they have a copy.

The discussion forum looks active and i love the fact that the members can recommend books. I would love to share my favorite author's works and be able to talk with someone about them. BTW...it is Jean M. Auel and I hate being the only person I know waiting impatiently for her next book (the last in her series).
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Review of I Asked God  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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I have to rate this lower, actually I would love to not have to rate this at all. while I appreciate that you are trying to share something that you read and loved, these are not YOUR words. You do give credit to the people or group that wrote the words, but I think you should really try and write your own pieces. You can be inspired by this and even adding your thoughts after their words would be acceptable. I just think you should have some direct link to what I just read.

Perhaps you can write how you feel about this writing that you found. Do you believe it? Why? Adding a personal touch is needed.



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Since it is your 13th month of sobriety today and your WDC anniversary, I felt it would be a good idea to visit the wonderful forum that was created and dedicated to you to celebrate you one year of sobriety last month.

I am so proud of you, for many reasons...but most importantly for this huge accomplishment. You have much to be proud of. I am happy to call you a friend and even more happy to know I will be in your life as you grow and spread your wings!

I love you!



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Rated: ASR | (5.0)

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Ah! I have found the founder of the famous 55 word contest. I have not yet entered it myself but have seen many 55 word stories in others ports. I am tempted to try this out very soon.

You have done a great job at the layout and design of the page. the rules are easy to understand and follow. The concept is unique. You can really say so much in a few words and you have recognized that. Okay...I will make it a point to enter very, very soon.

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Review of Equilibrium  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Ken,

I am here to review you again *Smile* I am wondering if I am going to run out of things to review in your port. Thank goodness, you always seem to be creating.

I love this poem. It reminded me of yin/yang-light and darkness must coexist. I felt very sad when reading, what felt to me, to be about a battle with depression. You offered the hope that it can all get better and will if you wait and/or search for the light.

The flow was great and the rhyme scheme was noted.

Another piece of yours that has touched my soul. Thank you for sharing!
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Review of Dove  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This is a collection of numerous poems. I think I have mentioned this to you before (with your collection number one) but it is hard to really concentrate on a poem when there are so many on one page. There are more than three and it gets to where the reader has to stop themselves from reading too fast. I want to enjoy and savor each poem. I would recommend splitting these up if you can into different static items or at least splitting them into groups of three (perhaps by subject content).

I really liked the Thanksgiving poem. It reminded me of my sister who always put ketchup on her turkey. Ick! LOL

I also enjoyed "snowflakes' and "Among the Kelp.' This does not mean I did not enjoy the others, these three were just my favorites.
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Review of Perfection  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This is a free verse poem you have written concerning your art. You give us a description of how you go about your art and how you worry that your works are completed.

Do you use charcoal or pastels? I use pastels mostly but am thinking of changing from drawing to painting when I can afford the necessary items. Do you have any of your art posted? I would love to see it.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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COLORING THE WORLD CONTEST TEMP. CLOSED  Open in new Window. (E)
A colorful contest that offers more.
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is a weekly contest that you hold. I know how very popular it is and for good reason. The contest is easy to understand and join. There is a new prompt each week and the entrant can either offer up a poem or short story.

The page layout is wonderfully done. I love the banner and easy to follow, colorful text.

The prizes are very generous being that they are given out weekly!

I hope you get many entries this week with your unique prompt: 'buried alive'.



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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This is a lovely acrostic poem I found while browsing your port. It was written to you by simplycomplex.

I think it shows how very loved you are by members of WDC. I also think it is neat how long you have been around WDC to have sponsored another moderator in the wonderful Rising Stars program.

You are many review groups boards. I think by the time you receive all your reviews, I might be close to having read your entire port.
Not that I am complaining. You have a good variety of items in your port and all are very interesting reads.


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Review of Worlds apart  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I am glad I choose this poem to read. It is so heartfelt and touching. It is a tribute to your brother who now sits in the world of eternity, as you said, a world apart but he is close to your heart. I am glad he touched your life so profoundly while he was here with you for such a shortened time. I find this poem very bittersweet. Even in your grief, you recognize the gifts your brother provided and still he lives on in you.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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While this poem is cute and catchy in rhythm, I really did not recognize the characters. i would not have known you were speaking about a vampire had I not read the description to the poem. The line where you make reference to blood coming from the eyes of others....I do not really understand. I did not think vampires bled from their eyes.

The witch seems entirely too nice, but perhaps that is because vampires are meaner or perhaps she is a good witch. I would love for you to look at this again as I think it is really unique and wonder if you could tweak parts of it to make the characters more 'real' (yes, I know there is no such thing as vampires and witches...but ya know what I mean I hope *Smile* )
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Review of Deep in my heart  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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WOW! This piece is one of your best! I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Your words stirred me and made me feel what you were saying. The piece flowed beautifully and the rhyme scheme helped with that beautiful flow.

You can tell what a beautiful person you are inside by the words you have written. thank you so much for sharing this piece with us.

Btw, I have noticed that you have entered much of your work into contests, but not this one? Why? I think you should find a place to enter it.
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Review of For my friends  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I love this heartfelt tribute to your friends, both online and 3D.

I wish it was a little longer as I was left feeling you had more to say. I did love what you did say however.

The best music I hear,

when your laughter reaches my ear.
Beautiful and so true. When someone we loves laughs, it is music to the ear.

I see a rhyme scheme and the piece flowed very well. Thank you for sharing this piece with us. I hope you sent a copy to all your friends.
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Review of If I had known  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is a poem that seems to be about heartbreak. I really loved the first and last verse. I think the middle one is a little less understood. You may want to revisit it and see if you feel it could be improved upon.

I would have tried
to knit us closer,
as close as could be.
Loved this!

I am glad you are a featured port in 'Lets review'. I have been enjoying my visit to your port *Smile*
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