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Review of fooled again  Open in new Window.
Review by Hermit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Your poem is very cute & lighthearted...I like it a lot. It shows imagination combined with a subject we can all appreciate...getting tricked! I will be reading more of your stuff...thanks.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
The topic is a good choice, especially because so many people are suffering with depression. This intro needs a little work, but mostly with punctuation (its should be it's; "don't worry you'll get through this", but ... should be "don't worry, you'll get through this," but ...) There are quite a few of these punctuation problems. I think it would be good to mention your age, since that is a big factor in whether or not someone would be interested in reading more. If I am 60 or 70, and this is a story about a teenager, I probably would not be too eager to read it. If I am a 15 to 25 year old, and suffering depression, I would be very inclined to keep reading. Of course, if I had depressed friends or relatives in the same age range as the writer, I might want to read your story in hopes of helping them. Good luck--you're off to a great start.
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