Well done Cherubann - a very well-written and enjoyable short story with a shock twist at the end. I assume from your final sentence there is more to come and I have, as I am sure anyone who reads it will have also, an obvious ending in mind (could Brian be the identical twin of Emily's husband?). I am sure that is not what you intend - and, in any case, sometimes a short story has more impact when the reader is left 'up in the air'. I look forward to your ending.
Warm regards - Smudger
Hi Carol
Hope you don't mind but I have just read your 'No Brakes' piece. The dialogue is very natural and believable - I guess we married people have all had similar conversations with our nearest and dearest. Men do find it hard to admit they are wrong so you got that right. Great ending.
I see what you mean about formatting - as it is on the screen it makes it harder to read and needs a space between conversations. I believe you can do that after you have uploaded your writing by clicking on the edit button.
Keep writing - I like your style.
Regards
Smidger
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