This story is very, very good. There is one place when the police after trying to kill the aliens where you used the word hysteric, You should have sued the word hysterically instead. I really liked your story, I hope that you keep going with it and make it into a full length novel. This is a book that I definitely buy. Good luck on getting this published!
You first chapter is very good and very gruesome and I liked it very much. As you used the word heard in referring to a group, it should be spelled herd. Other than a few misspellings your story is very, very good. I didn't read chapter two, unfortunately, because I couldn't figure out how to get to it. But I am willing to bet it every bit as good as the first. I would definitely buy this book.
I thought this was very good. It caught my attention right away and kept it all the way through. I hope this is just a partial story because I would like to read more--I want to know where Logan is taking Madi! Your story is very very good.
I really liked it alot. It is really well written and left me wanting more. I hope you will enlarge this into a full length book. It has really got my interest going and I sure hope you do write more of this story. Keep up the good work! I will be glad to review more of your work that you post to this website.
As the author said it is very dark but it has a haunting quality to that I liked quite a lot. If that is something that is rusty, I would sure like to see something that is polished. Very nice. I would like to see some clarification as to who 'she' is though. I would rate it as a 4.
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