I enjoyed the story and found it a page-turner. There could have been more description to add to the spooky atmosphere and to create more tension. I really liked the ending and the use of repetition. I would have liked to hear more about your friends. What was it about Becky that made you think you might marry her? Jonny seemed to be a nervous type. Why was that? And I suppose the most interesting point for me, in terms of back story, is why a seventeen year old would be friends with a sixteen year old and a girl around sixteen years old? At that age one year seems like a huge difference, looking back!
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