That is hilarioous! A little taste of naivety in the world. I delight in simple, everyday comedy gold, and I (finally) found some. In my opinion, one of the greatest gifts conferred on mankind is the ability to make others laugh, and you undoubtedly have it!
That was a very creative, original story. It reminded me of a story I read where a dog fought with its reflection. I loved experiancing Bella's bewilderment at her owner's reactions. You fashioned the story so you couldn't help cheering for Donna to be punished. Excellent character descriptions. You are very good at making emotional connections with your reader. I enjoyed reading this story very much.
That was a great story with a very creative plot. You were very good at the buildup, but don't draw it out too long or your readers will become bored. And remember, you don't need to describe things irrelevant to the story. Leave some of the imagining up to the reader. I enjoyed reading your story very much. Keep writing!
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