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Review of Laying So Close  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Rather interesting piece here. The names in the first stanza did throw me off a bit. I thought it was a threesome or an at first. The rhyming makes it that much cheekier. It's good though.
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Review of My Little Secret  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I just love poems like this. I hope to run into more like this. However, "across y chest as you whip me" has a typo. It should be "across my chest as you whip me." Other than that, it's really sexy and great.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Whoa! This is some powerful stuff you have here. It starts out as sexy and then it turns dark. You have a couple of typos like "inncence" and "My hope are heightened." I think I might like to draw ideas from this one as well. You did good.


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Review of Brother or Lover  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This poem reminds me of some of the work that I do. I really want to draw inspiration from this because it. I love the repetition of the words "brother" and "lover." They really draw the theme home. You did a good job with this poem.


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Review of DirtyDarling  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This poem reminds me of one of my own characters in her struggle with lust and resistance. You do what I do with the sentences in a way. However, it looks bunched together and sloppy. If you break up where the sentences end, it'll look much more organized.


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Review of Your Power  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I really like this one. She is overcome with his loving power. This is the type of sexy I would like to see more often. You did really good with the wording and the repetition.


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Review of Speakers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The rhyme scheme is good in this one. I also like the mood in this poem. The only thing missing to this is music.


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Review of Hard Rock  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I have to admit, this poem made me giggle, not so much Twist and Shout, but I got a chuckle. You are one Crazy Mama(?) with the Beatles and Rolling Stones references. Now, I Know it's Only Rock 'N' Roll, but I like it with the rhyme scheme. As for your challenge...

Nineteenth Nervous Breakdown
I Want to Hold Your Hand
Sympathy for the Devil
All You Need is Love
Gimme Shelter
Brown Sugar
No Satisfaction
Help
Come Together
Ticket to Ride
Eight Days a Week
Tumbling Dice

That's all I got.


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Review of Melting Bodies  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This one is a good one here. I like how you play on Victoria's Secret and Calvin Kleine. I love how I can see the action and almost feel the emotions. I got confused at one by, thinking that it was the guy talking, but then I realized it was the girl. I think if you clear that up a bit you will see stars. You did good overall.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Ah, there is something about religion and sex that makes both more exciting. You did a good job blending both and displaying it in a tasty way. You started with a good title and you reached us with the themes, leaving us excited. You did a good job.


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Review of Erotic Haiku 03  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
You've got a cheeky one here. Surprise, there is a baby! Please do more of these haikus. You are good at these.


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Review of Erotic Haiku 02  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Here we have another good one. Can I ask a dumb question? What does repose mean? I never heard that word before. It's still good.


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Review of Erotic Haiku 01  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I like this one. The auburn hair part reminds me of one of my characters. You did the form correctly again and it leaves me wanting more. You did good.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I have to admit, I counted the syllables as I read each word aloud. Surveys says... you followed the format of the haiku correctly. The first one is the strongest one you have. You paint a flirty image like you set out to do. Tell me, are they connected into one big poem? If so, that is neat. If not, happy accident? Either way, it's good.


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Review of Gris Gris Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The concept is rather interesting. I like the rhyme scheme. I really want this to be in actual pictures or turned into a short story. I would just love to see the full before and after of this poem.
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