Really intrigued! An excellent start that makes me want to read more.
I would develop the main character, Rena, more. Deeper emotions and more personal insights would really make her pop on the page. I love the visualization the words give though. Maybe dive into a bit of background as well?
Really enjoyed this!
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.10 seconds at 6:21am on Nov 24, 2024 via server WEBX2.