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Rated: E | (4.5)
First off - I am sorry for the loss of your aunt.

You write very well. I love the descriptions and the contrast of the little girl against the older woman in pain. There was one sentence that I had an issue with - last sentence - first paragraph: "And from there to the walking frame ....". The sentence ran on a bit too long and I had to reread it. I think I got what you were trying to achieve but it stumbled a little.

Great job! - you should consider adding to the story.

Nika
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