The descriptions were excellent. You did a great job of putting a clear image of Finn in the reader's head. I would suggest seperating the sentences into paragraphs. Overall though, I thought this was an excellent exposition. Keep up the good work! ;)
~Nick
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/nick_m
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.11 seconds at 1:40am on Nov 11, 2024 via server WEBX2.