This is a really good poem. I loved everything about it. The only thing I could really say could be changed is stanza five last line. You put quite which I think you meant to put quiet. That really is the only thing that I saw as lacking. Thanks for sharing keep writing.
Very well done and well put, I love the imagery in it. Your use of words is amazing I love the parts that talk about
"Bring your dollars, bring your coins,
I’ll light a fire between your loins.
Though it seems twisted wickedness,
Your heart says “No!”, but body “Yes!”
I love that stanza it really brings what you are trying to get across home. I love this poem!
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