I have to say, I enjoy your work and even when I don't review, I find myself reading your stuff more often than not. I think I have one more out of the seven to read. The poem you wrote is moving and it flowed nicely from verse(right word?) to verse. Keep doing what you are doing and I'll keep reading.
I see no grammatical errors (not my strong suit though) and the structure is sound, but I still have to go middle of the road. I like that it flows nicely, but as I write this review I feel myself struggling to find anything extraordinary about it. Your a good writer, but I don't think this piece showa that off.
I like the way the story fit the title. For your character it was definitely pouring. At the end of your story I wanted more,(my main reason why I don't read short stories) but I throughly understand that this is a short story. And as such I have to say it is one of the best I've read in a long time. Kudos.
Very nice. I like the way you paint a picture and give a brief but detailed description of this child's past. I kind of want a little more on who or what is chasing her and why. Also where does the voice come from? Is she supernatural or destined to be? Anyway, this was a wonderfully written story.
I know what you want to say, but it all gets lost in trying to decipher your sentence structure. This was a hard read for something so short. I think it was a good effort, but maybe you should read a few short poems, and some haiku so you can see how the structure of a poem can aid in bringing the message forth. Keep trying, I think you have potential.
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