That was shockingly sweet. I had no idea we were looking through the pov of a dog until he called the dog over with treats! And the ending stanza was almost bittersweet, an ending without an ending. this is some really good work! good job, and good luck writing more :)
Wow! this was actually informative, and /interesting/. There should really be more stories about lighthouses, people drifting up ashore on some lonely lighthouser's land, anything really! And this story about the tallest one, it's so sad it had to be destroyed, oh mother earth you cruel mistress
Good stuff! I look forward to reading whatever else you've got
meh, i wonder if it really is as cool as peter thinks? maybe he just wants to have liam hink of him as cool? it seems to me like he isn't exactly a father figure, even if he wanna be... which is sad. so maybe it is liam's fault. and this is only chapter 1? this is good, and i hope you wrote more :)
i do't get why there isn't an option for the even newer fnaf? i want to play as the doll girl, and i would write some of it myself if i was familiar enough with the material... as intersting as this is, i need more of it to know for sure if it's good or not.
can characters be eaten? if you say yes, perfect story. as it is now, i dont know how believable these otcs and aliens is. my boy... i'd cool it down. needs more meat on it's bones, this story is dry mang, still good still good but dry, and if i was good at writing stories... i'd write some of this for you.
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