So ... this is a story about growth competition, meaning getting taller, grwoing butts and boobs. It even has the erotica tag ... but it's for all ages so you cannot add anything like a girl in heat or naked parts?
Come on dude, I agree if you don't want explicit sex or hardcore stuff but ... you can't have erotica and pegi18 in the same project.
well, this is not a lot but there is potential ... but some plot hat to be added.
Actually, I think the problem here would be the fetish priority. I have nothing against it but from what I've seen, it's supposed to be only Yani just enjoying her transformation without real plot planned behind.
Now, maybe I'm the one expecting adventure, drama, twists and/or character evolution where it's not meant to be but look at it that way:
You have the choice of two comics, both about a girl turning into a dragoness.
In the first one, the girl is just growing and becoming a sexy dragon with an entice position.
In the secound one, the girl becomes a sexy dragon too, but she learns the joy of flying in the sky, she learns to use her fire breath in usefull situations. You know, using the fact she has become a dragoness.
I don't say we need an epic adventure, but maybe more than just a transformation addiction coud be good.
It's a fun story and the idea is really good. the idea of being kept by the crual Ena and and only Gale could save him. Also, the fact that the queen is presented in the intro/rules but not in the first chapters give a the chance to write her as a phantoom charater (every body talks about her, every body know what she's like, we here from her actions via her people, but we never see her ... at least, after some chapters)
for my part I like the version were Gale doesn't start as an ally, It's the fun of interactives to find a way to make the story follow the resume. I think I did a correct job there. Don't hesitate to read and telle me what you think about it. :)
for the other routs, I read them less (maybe because Gale is a little to freindly with a war prisonner) but I should take more time there.
(sorry for the low amound of points. I don't have much to share for now)
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