Man! This story really gripped my attention from the beginning till the end. And i thought that the whole idea on the father taking the 'beating' for his daughter in some supernatural phenomenon is really refreshing and creative. And wow, this story really got me thinking about alot of things. Like the number of times the daughter got into fatal accidents, i was thinking to myself "Thank God her dad was there".
I think this is a really well written story, and I'd really want to read all your pieces to learn from you. (:
I guess, this piece taught me more that i can critic on.
Haha! A funny read. I really loved the whole gist of the story. About a man being named Tracy, and his actual name was Pat and it was funny cuz those names are technically Bi-sexual, but its funny to hear from a guy's perspective how he would feel about those names while girls may be okay with it. All in all, i thought it was really cute, and it had a really interesting perspective.
Keep writing, i'll be reading more of your pieces soon!
Naomi
Really interesting story line! i was drawn into the story hoping to see what would come next. You shouldn't stop there. It would be great if could go into further detail on the trip that the man took to find his 'Eve'. (: Could be a really great novel! Do let me know if you are intending to continue it.
Really love your story.
Naomi
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