That's a good piece,thought provoking, you know i was born in a city and i always dreamed of living a simple life in a country town, where everybody knows you, country music playing (i love it). But i didn't know that people living there wants to live in the city if they do then its a mistake 'cause it's lonely up here in the city. Whatever i liked your story though short and could have been longer, still good. Check out my portfolio too (need reviews too).........keep writing
Liked it, you really succeeded in telling the story in an effective manner. But it could have been longer and also i am now wondering how that symbol would look like. Whatever it was good, i have to check your other stories too, keep on writing. And check out my portfolio too.........
What can i say, the most lucky people are those ,who after they die, are remembered for how they impacted the lives in a positive way of several others they came in contact with. And if we just make somebody's life worthwhile, or induce a positive change in them, we could say that we fulfilled our purpose. And yes, you said it right what matters is the sprouts that we left all over the world. Nicely written, kudos. Check out my portfolio too......keep writing
You really succeeded in expressing the emotions of your characters, and your command on language is great too. But you left many questions left unanswered i don't know whether you intended it to be but still the story could have been longer and explaining How did she die and why, what was the necklace all about. But overall nicely written. Check out my portfolio too......
It was, well what can i say, not enough to judge, you should have written more for this part. Well, i guess you'll be writing more parts and i will surely read them. However everything seemed rushed in this, in my opinion its important that you write about your character's reactions, feelings like when old lady saw the dead body, how did she feel, it's just helpful to catch the reader's attention and make him read further. But still it was good, but i've to read more to really understand since in my opinion, for a mystery story, the end is the most important. Check out my portfolio too.........
Great, you succeeded in almost everything. You correctly expressed Gus's feelings, fears and loneliness. And took the story to a believable and unsuspecting climax. You have a very good command on your language too, all in all, i gotta check out your other works too. Keep up the work, and check out my portfolio.
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