Great job with the poem. It felt like you have a similar writing style to me when i attempt poetry. Also it should be said i'm in temporary retirement from the game. Because as you allude to, once you start liking it, it bites you.
Ella. I can only rate this perfect. Its so technically advanced. There's such a contrast in meanings with each line, that in a strange way marry up brilliantly. I'm sure other readers of this will appreciate the natural skill which has been evident in the last 3 poems
Ella Viaja this is honestly, unbelievable. My favourite of all so far. Your way with words flows so well, which allows this poem to come and go with rhyme.
Although i have come up with a seventh kind for your poem, i thought it is really well put together. Observation poetry like this is the best. A possible seventh could be; those who don't celebrate Christmas because of its pagan origin, in favor of showing kindness and goodwill all year round. Just a thought. Great poem.
What a touching poem. Obviously from your poem it has made you stop and think when you're away from home, that while you can enjoy the sun, some for many a reason have to fight it, and in it. "Those ruled by the gun" line - good one. Sad that at the moment we live with this every day.
Now this is the kind of writing i like. Extrememly observant, fully appreciative of the citys' history. Reading that, it was easy to begin to envision what the place might be like to visit. Having read that i wouldn't mind stopping by one day. Nice Stuff!
(2nd Paragraph - "to the East is the cold,-" i think you mean 'west')
Being somebody who is pretty much addicted to flight and flighing, i really appreciated the sentiments you were describing in your poem here. Its true, as you poetically alluded to the world can at times be much more beautiful from the air. Keep up the flighing!
Nathan James
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