Love that poem. Could feel every word. The rhyming is consistent and flow is smooth. The content is positive and in my view, very true as well. Thank you, I enjoyed the journey. Everyone needs a place for silent meditation with the Lord. Keep on writing. May your days be filled with creativity.
I enjoyed that. You spoke of the prompt very well. I think two words, moderation and interest. Everything in moderation as share but don't give all away to point of hurting self. And if interest is not given, how can we expect interest to be given to us. Keep writing. I enjoyed the thoughts this generates. May your days be filled with creativity.
Wow! How horrific that would be. A power you are not supposed to use. And you get it just about teen time. Good story indeed. Technically I see no errors or bumps. The story flow is nice and consistent. It keeps you going till the end. Very nicely done. I enjoyed the journey. May your days be filled with creativity. Keep on writing.
Good use of the prompt! I really enjoyed reading your poem. I could feel it was meant for many of us. We feel lucky if something good happens for us. But recognizing that its all in Gods hands is wonderful ending to this. Great job. I enjoyed the journey, thank you. Keep on writing.
Very good poem. I loved it. But it shows what I always have said. Everything you do, feel, think, and all emotions come together and helps make you the person you are today. It changes everyday and you will get older with more and more experience. Like building a house, a good foundation, and lots of nails. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for the journey. Keep on writing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Great puzzle, a good challenge. Took me about 30 minutes or more but kept my attention so I didn't notice. I enjoyed that. Thank you for the journey. May your days be filled with creativity.
Great little poem and good rhyming. It flowed very smooth and had good temp. The content was excellent and easy to follow. I have been there to. I understand the feelings and frustration. But the extra money is always welcomed and band aids the pain slightly. Thank you for the journey. Keep on writing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Loved that Limerick, very enjoyable with just the right tempo. Very strange but nice picture. The left with her son was a good twist. I enjoyed this little journey and the flow was perfect. Dancing on ones grave is certainly a different place. Though years ago they had picnics in graveyards. Thank you. Keep on writing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Such a cute story. And so very true. This was perfect scenario of almost every married couple with kids. I loved it. Back seat make out sessions were classic in my time, than a cruise through Shoney's Big Boy drive in with your lady beside you. Wow such memories. Excellent job. Thank you for the journey. May your days be filled with creativity.
The first a spirit filled Christian, the second a self proclaimed Christian. To many profess not possess. For the two verses do not apply. Interesting subject but all too true. Thank you for the journey. We sometime need to be reminded. Keep writing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Cool poem! I enjoyed reading it. I can see this fitting most young people these days, for some reason thats the impression I get from it. You see a persons soul through their eyes, and feel their soul through their poetry. Keep on writing. I enjoyed the journey. May your days be filled with creativity.
Wow. Such a journey in a story I usually by pass. I enjoyed this one. It was good enough to keep my attention and the flow was very easy to follow. It makes a person think, about past episodes or even future episodes in their own life. Very well done. Keep on writing. May your days be filled with creativity. Thank you for the journey.
Wow. Emotions city! I could see and feel the despair and confusion. Even anger. Such a deep poem, looking into a persons eyes you see their soul. Reading their poetry you feel their emotions. Very good job. Thank you for the journey. Keep on writing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Very good poem. I can understand the word count limit sometimes is just that. Like a creative limit sometimes. Very well said. Only four lines but says a page full. Enjoyed the journey. Keep on writing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Two reviews in a row and both about food. Who would have thought. Love the poem, though not sure I could read many of that type. And the note about IHOP and Denny's about same as what I used to have everyday years ago. Thanks for the journey. Keep writing. May your days be filled with IHOP breakfast.
Ok now I need to check refrig for leftovers. Never considered hungry as an emotion but you got it! Good poem, love standing there waiting for it to get done.
Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing. May your days be filled with joy.
Beautiful poem! Wasn't sure what to expect but it was excellent. Very clear and descriptive. I liked the journey, can visualize setting at rest in a battle situation and your mind wonders. Thank you. Keep writing. May your days be filled with joy.
I enjoyed that poem. I am an old tech guy. Technology paid my bills and has made life easier. But, don't we hate those buts, I hate what Technology did, no kids playing in fields. No basketball hoop crowds. Nobody on street just walking. Playgrounds empty. Everyone, myself included, in front of a screen of some sort, TV, or Computer. You brought this all out very well. I loved the thoughts it brought forward. Please keep writing, and may your days be filled with joy. Thank you.
I enjoyed that dinner. Picked this up on the read and review click. Good story, easy to follow. Dialog very clear and not hard to follow. Loved the little twist at the end. Very good picture. Thank you for dinner.
Keep on writing. May your days be filled with joy.
Such a beautiful poem. Very clear in what it is saying. Look into someone's eyes and you see their soul. Read their poetry you feel their emotions. Very well done. Reaching someone's emotions through words is awesome to me. Thank you for the journey. Keep on writing. May your days be filled with joy.
I'm an old syfy fan. Andre Norton, Issac Asimov. Love those. Your story was very good, it held my interest and I noticed only a couple of oops. Words dropped and comma or two. But I'm not a technical writer/reader so the story was what I focused on, and it was very interesting ending. I like it and think you could stretch it out even more if you can get the word count higher. Thanks for the journey, keep on writing. May your days be filled with joy.
My heart goes out to you and anyone that is forced to leave their home. To me its not a matter of right or wrong, because morally that falls way short. I can not imagine being forced out by a government, but that does not keep me from feeling for you. Prayers that you have the strength to overcome whatever comes your way. Keep on writing. May your days turn to joy soon.
Very good! Interesting as well. You explained something that some people really are clueless about. They use resolve and determination but do not realize it. I see resolve as an engine, and determination is putting it into drive. I enjoyed the thoughts this brought forward. Good job. Keep on writing. May your days be filled with joy.
Very nice little poem. Using the prompt in first line then painting the picture as you move down the lines. I enjoyed it. It kept my interest and brought back a memory or two. Thank you. Keep writing. May your days be filled with joy.
Very cute and different story. You did a great job pulling the reader down the line. It held my interest and had to chuckle a bit, about not being able to go thru the main floor where the sign was posted. Good job with dialog, very clear. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you. Keep writing. May your days be filled with joy.
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