Excellent story. Good idea and good implementation. Followed it easly and was very interesting. However, you wanted a honest review, there are a few small issues. Four lines down an extra 'it'.
3rd paragraph Kala poked her tough against her cheek tough=tongue
The crystals were scared to the royal house... scared=sacred
to balance and masculine and (first and=the)
Good job. I enjoyed reading your preps for Nano. With whole family involved. I could only wish for that. It all looks good and reads very well. I enjoyed the preparations, was an excellent read. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing. My your days be filled with creativity. Hope Nelles story was good.
Ok I have been showed up by a nine year old. Fantastic job with the poem. I loved it. About the holiday, very descriptive and easy to read and follow. Knowing a child was the writer makes it so much better. I enjoyed the journey, keep lighting those candles. God loves it.
I am reading of someone that was here many moons ago. And not real happy about the changes. I'm sorry. Everything costs more these days. No free internet sites anylonger and the equipment needed is outrageous as far as money goes. However, I have been a member for a while now, the official contests (by WdC) are not the only ones. They also offer ROAK, which will allow you to get more space and advanced account on thier tab. I used them at first for then I won enough GP to pay for my space. Give it another try. Look around and ask. You may find it much more and better then before. Please keep writing, don't let small issues stop that.
Beautiful poem. I see a child writing, to him he is a dragon, actually he is whatever he is writing about. His vision is of all the writing possibilities. The knight next door shows this. I love the free verse. Very easy and flowed nicely. Good job. I saw no technical issues, spelling and grammar. Thank you for the journey. Keep writing.
Neat word search. On all the minerals. Not being familiar with the names makes this a good search. Thank you for the Word Search. Keep it up. I enjoyed it and expect others will as well. Thank you. Keep writing.
Nice poem, about your love. The content was good and clear, very descriptive. Very easy to follow. The rhyming scheme ABAB was smooth and flowed very well. I enjoyed reading this and brought memories of my first love. Thank you for the journey, may your days be filled with creativity. Keep writing.
Beautiful acrostic poem. Well done, very easy to read and understand. Crystal is being compared to a lost love that left an empty space. Good poem, hope Crystal enjoyed it. Feel a lot of emotion. Suggestion, I would use the comma a bit. It won't hurt it and would make it much easier read. Other than that, good job. You have talent, use it. Keep writing.
Nice poem, even before the end, I guessed it was the writer. How hard life can be for a young one. The poem was good, but I do have a suggestion. Pull it to the side and rearrange the lines slightly and you will have a fully rhyming scheme of ABAB. With the rhyming seems awkward makes me stumble in reading it. Just a suggestion. I enjoyed the content and does make us think how we look upon the little one. Thank you for sharing.
BRAVO!! Well said. I hate that junk mail, and now they try to make it look official and important and scarey. If it weren't for my mail box the mail would just go straight to the garbage. Idea, forward all our junk mail to said senator. Good write. I enjoyed reading that, very easy to see. And totally agree with its sentiment. Keep writing. Thank you for sharing.
Nice poem. Everyone thinks more than friends means physical and it doesn't. Soul mates, besties, or whatever they call it. It's your best friend. Nice free verse, flowed well, and easy to understand. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
Sweet poem. AABB rhyming scheme. Was very easy to follow and flowed nicely. The content, about the beautiful place you were in and how you used to share it with a loved one, that will never be there again. I enjoyed reading this, could feel setting there at the river. Have done that many times. Beautiful wording, good talent. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
A dream of open seas. Love the poem. Flowed very well. And kept you in mind being at the edge. Seeing the broken dream and how it could have been, resigning your self to turn away and back down the road you were on again. I enjoyed this journey, like standing and looking at the sea and then turning away. Been there. It calls you, you use the bird to call you. Loved the poem. Keep writing.
I feel getting ready to step out the door into life. These are the things you must have. Wonderful little poem. Very clear and to the point. It flowed easy and nice tempo. Content was very descriptive. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for the journey. May your day be filled with creativity. Keep writing.
Good Free verse. I see a mind stepping into insanity. Good job showing that. All the steps shown very well. Easy read and easy to follow. Sometimes we really don't know where the dividing line is, between sanity and insanity. Good writing. I find nothing technically wrong and the content was great. Keep writing. Lots of talent there.
Good job, inside a players head while at bat. Very good visual and can see this on any baseball field. The little things people don't think of. Loved the story, felt like I was watching the pitch. I saw no technical issues, easy to read and follow. Even slide description was good. Thank you for the journey. Keep on writing.
First and second stanza I could visualize setting in school detention. Hit that feeling right on the head. And setting at home supposed to do homework, but naw it will wait. Good poem. Took me back to jr high school detention. Was my usual spot anyway. It flowed nicely and the tempo was good. Very clear in what its saying.
Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.
Beautiful poem! Right off I could see snorkeling around the coral reef off of Florida coast. I loved the poem. Took me right back there. Good free verse, very descriptive, and good tempo. Thank you for sharing and stirring those old memories. May your days be filled with creativity. Keep writing.
Seems these rainy days are good for bringing back memories. I see you and her in class looking out the window as it rains with a mist. I have set there as well. Very nice free verse. At first I thought this was going to be difficult but it was all very clear. I felt the warm memories as well as seeing the cool rain. Thank you for the journey. Good job. Keep writing.
Wonderfully inspiring story! My adventures started in second grade. My teacher said same thing about reading, thus I was hooked. I loved the story and the picture it painted, it was very easy to follow even the transition to forest without a hitch. Good job. I enjoyed this. Keep on writing.
Loved this story. And the way you had us wait till the end to see what you sprayed. Good job. Held my attention all the way through. Luck was with you, seems you got rid of the bugs for good. That is one cute story to have in your pocket. No technical bumps and good flow. Very descriptive. The picture of you looking at a spray bottle then looking around the yard is great picture! Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed this. Keep writing.
Good little story. The story told by a cat is such a good idea. I loved it. I can see and feel the cat through the whole story. The picture was nice and clear, cat on lap and heading to palace. Really good story with a different POV. Thank you for sharing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Wonderful prose. I enjoyed reading it. Growing up some of these things were similar to yours. You learn to appreciate the finer things in life. Rather than take them for granted. It's a shame how the family unit everywhere almost has fallen. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed the memories. Keep on writing.
Neat little poem. I had to lookup what Rictameter form was. Good job. I can see the short, skinny start of a dogwood standing forlorn in the cold. Good job with the form, poem was easy to follow and tempo was nice and even. Thank you for sharing this. May your days be filled with creativity. Keep on writing.
Love the poem. Such talent! I could understand and feel each question. This brings a lot of questions to todays thoughts. Do we really have freedom to write? With freedom comes responsibility, many don't understand that. Most everything begins with written words. Good job. I enjoyed this and will keep the question in my mind. Thank you so much for the journey. Keep on writing.
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