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Review of Face of the Storm  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting that he shows the storm as female. It's a beautiful piece looking at something that occurs naturally and commonly. I enjoyed reading this. the rhyming scheme was easy to discern. The work is very descriptive and easy to understand. I would suggest a bold title above and maybe look at it centered. Only a suggestion, this piece is beautiful as it stands. Thank you. Keep writing.

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Review of River of Dirt  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A touching story. Girl goes back to where her Dad would always take her, when she was little. The story implies it is all in her head, but also that something supernatural could be happening. Good story, I think it would do well to expand this more. Has a strong premise. Good job. Thank you for sharing. It does have a couple of typos you may want to check for. Keep writing.

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Review of The Fat Fly  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this poem. About a fly that is being a pure nuisance. Everyone has dealt with that. The structure is good, with good rhyming scheme, ABAB. It's easy to read and very descriptive. I can see setting in a chair, with the fan blowing, and trying to swat that fly. Good job taking an everyday situation and making it an entertaining read. Only suggestion is center it and put the title above it. Would look impressive. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.

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Review of Salvation Poem  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A beautiful testimony in poet form. I loved this. Reinforcing our relationship with our Savior. There is a bump. God sent Him to us to give us Salvation.
I wouldn’t trade that gift for the grandest fortune.' These two lines break the rhyming. I would try to work a rhyming word into one of these lines. Other than that, it is a beautiful poem. I enjoyed and remembered where I stand with the Savior. Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The End of R&R  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
We who have not had to walk that walk are sometime oblivious to the pain and turmoil a service person goes through. We can say we understand, but till you go to a different country to kill another person, we don't. My heart goes out to those returning men and women. War is a terrible thing. Thank you for sharing an intimate part of your life. I enjoyed reading this. Only suggestion is to increase the font size, but it's a wonderful story to make us all think, as it is.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
A free verse of love, then love lost. Good little poem, some rhyming makes it move well. I enjoyed this, as many may have walked the same path. Everything we do is connected to the lost love. But in the end, we know we must continue one step in front of the other. Good job. I enjoyed reading this. 'I noticed not' shows love is blinding. Keep writing, good talent here. I would center it with a bold title. All of this is just an opinion. Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Wanderlust  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this little poem. An alternate rhyming scheme works well with it. How we see and feel life. Everything we do or experience shows life through it. Good job with a small poem. From Duchess to peasant, my favorite part, we all experience life and death. I enjoyed this, only suggestion is to center it with a title on top. Good talent here. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.

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Review of Furreverr.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
A lovely cat story. Good pictures brought out. Pretty descriptive. I would break out the paragraphs and increase the font. Just for readability. I did notice a couple of punctuation errors, easy to fix. The story is great, probably could expand this even. A cat outside that has been declawed could have lots of problems. Good story, wrote well. Some good talent showing here. Thank you. Keep writing.

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Review of The Old Usual  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A free verse of being young and with friends under the shade of a tree. A wonderful story is told with this. I loved reading this. Caused me to think back, we would meet between houses, with matchbox cars. We made whole cities there. Was a wonderful time to be young. I see no issues with the poem, my only suggestion is to increase the font for readability by mobiles. Using some punctuation would help as well. Good job, you painted a good picture. Keep writing.

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Review of Parting Words  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Such a touching short story. I love the premise. It was not totally understood about the hospice. I'm a little lost, did Tom confess while the phone was hidden in the rocking chair, and overheard by someone on the phone? That would seem more like it. Otherwise, why would the police be called? Make that last few lines a bit clearer. Good story premise. Lot you could do with it at the end. Some good talent showing through here. Thank you for the journey.

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Review of Just Look  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Looking into a mirror at this age sometimes is traumatic. I enjoyed your poem; the rhyming scheme was good. The poem made me look at myself as well. I see the exact same things you see now. The only thing I would suggest is to title the top of the page. The poem carries a lot of emotion, just as it is meant to. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed the poem. Keep writing.

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Review of Mutiny  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Neat poem. Great rhyming scheme. When read aloud it works nicely. The mutiny of a pirate ship. I could see them running with swords and bandanas on their heads. A fight for them. The captain still thinks he should be better than any of those around him. For some reason this got me thinking of the 'Pirates of the Caribbean'. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.

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Review of Synchronicity  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the thought this poem brings to mind. There is a connection between us. The hard part is naming it because it could be any one of the reasons or all of the reasons. I do believe the connection is when we need what the other person offers, compassion, or a good word. Even a smile is a connection. Good job with this, I enjoyed reading it and thinking about it. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful piece.

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Review of The Caregiver  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Cute little poem. Short. But packs a load of emotion. Having dealt with several caregivers, I see them as walking angels. The give of their selves so others can live a somewhat normal life. Good little poem. I love it. I suggest increase font size, so mobiles can enjoy it as well. Thank you for sharing such an inspiring piece.

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Review of Candle-Rope-Cave  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good flash story. Prompts are used very well. Stuck in a cave, infected by a zombie bite. I gather he was trying to hang himself rather than turn. Good story, I would love to have had a little more background, but I understand the word limit. Reading it aloud you may find a typo or two, I would suggest trying that. It's a good story, well written. The climb of emotion is tough because it starts high immediately. Thank you for sharing this, I enjoyed reading it. Keep writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
A wonderful free verse painting a word picture of your dad. I could see him opening up and smell the oil and gas. When you have worked on engines like that, the smell stays with you. I love the story this tells, I feel like I'm almost prying while watching him. Good job. Very descriptive and flows nicely. Thank you for sharing. My only suggestion would be to increase size of the font for readability on mobiles. I really enjoyed this one.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Loved this flash story. Good use of the prompt. Had me thinking all they of corporate spies or government spies. Never thought of birthday party. Good job, easy to read. Enjoyable quick story. I can even see filling the room with balloons and closing the door. I enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing. I see no suggestions that could make this better. Keep writing.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A cheeseburger in paradise. Yep, not one of those thin processed meat with bland stuff on it. A real hamburger with melted cheese all of it runny on your hand. Loved this poem. Took me back to 'Happy Days' even. Good job, I enjoyed the picture it brought to mind. Suggest larger font for readability is all I would change. Thank you for sharing. Now I got to go find me a burger.

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Review of The Cat Knows  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The cat knows prose! This is a wonderful piece. Very full of information about our wonderful cats. Makes us glad to be adopted by them. Once all of our children stopped being children, the cats moved in and adopted us. Love this piece. Good job. Do I have suggestions? None for this other than share a link in Newsfeed. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading this.

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This is excellent for those who want to have their work published. Or just to be able to write stories of a certain caliber that could be published. I suggest checking and reverifying the links as needed. Would be a good source of inspiration after links get updated. Good job pulling this together. Lot of work here. Thank you for sharing.

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An ancestral free verse. A very good way to become familiar with history. There were many tribes at the time and they would attack each other at times over territory. If I may suggest, center the enter piece. It's very good as free verse, and great information. I could see the pregnant lady guiding and dealing with the expedition. Such a beautiful history. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading this.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
A bee and a flower. Two loves. The blooming of life when two loves first come together. The wonderful fulfillment of emotions. Then one passes on, the one remaining must endure till passing, and then once again they shall be together. I laid my mother-in-law to rest a couple of weeks ago. Our family's thoughts were she was now with her husband who passed 20 years ago. Bittersweet but still inspiring. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading this. My only suggestion is to center the poem and cut back on the line spaces. It will still generate the emotion. Good job. Keep writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice story. I could feel the emotion while reading it. The twist at the end was quick and sharp. It was a thought of waking from a nightmare, only to be in a nightmare. Good premise, used with the tv show 'Big Bang Theory' a few times. I enjoyed this journey, was short but full of emotion. Only technical thing I would do is put line spaces between paragraphs. Makes it easier to read. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
Some good writing talent here. But I'm lost in the story. It jumps to something totally unrelated. It's got a good premise. A kid hires 2 PI's that have their own problems with differences. In the dialog, it's easy to get lost, who is speaking? I would differentiate with tags. The writing is good. Strong description. The storyline can be continued. It's a good start and expanding on it can only make it better. Keep writing.

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Review of Game Night Glory  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Excellent twist. Build up with the simple word exchange, then make a big splash with "the Game of Life". Good job. I enjoyed reading that. I could see that happening with somebody that's really competitive. No suggestions on this. It's a good flash story with a twist. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.

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