Not too shabby for a half hour write. I guess when the inspiration hits, it is like a lightening flash. The story is engrossing and lays a nice trap for George. I think I noticed a typo in one sentence where George questions if this is the end. I began thinking of a hitman as a little more colder in personality, but Eliza really could be making him soft I realized. But as I get to end, is Eliza now the cold blooded killer. It is strange to imagine the knitting woman enjoying looney tunes is also a hitman, but everyone needs a hobby. Even an assassin. Good story. Thank you. I enjoyed it.
"I am living to destroy myself." I love that line. It is the reason I felt compelled to review this. You took me on a wondering walk. In my opinion, which take it or leave it, my only issue is the structure of your lines. My walk through this need direction. I needed signs that this is where I want to pause, and let the view sink in, and experience the gravity of what you are trying to convey.
The beginning three lines are thought provoking. They grab the readers interest. This could be almost an internal monologue of Lucifer falling.
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