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Rated: E | (4.0)
I thought this story was quite nice. It has good imagery, a good plot-line, and interesting characters. The flow does seem to be a little choppy, but I think it could be easily fixed just by rearranging a few plot points. If you describe all of the islands at the beginning of the story, including Serpent Island, it would free you up to delve a little further into Savanna's story. It would also allow you to broaden her conversation with the woman in the village. This might help to create a more rounded character. Awesome job!!


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