I was confused becouse there are many grammar errors such as missing commas and words, and missing details. The story is very unclear and has a bad flow to it. it's very hard to understand and read.
This is a truly amazing story, some grammar errors, but not enough to worry about. You did a great job with the story, it had good details, and imagery, great use on personification!
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