This is a wonderful piece. I feel the emotion that lies behind it. The only thing I feel that could be improved is the use of the word "but". It is such a hard word for the softness of this piece.
My favorite from this stanza is:
I know
a lifetime together means
countless sacrifices and pardons.
But tell me, sweetheart, do we ever find
thornless shrubs of roses, in the gardens?
This is absolutely beautiful and brought tears to my eyes. The love you feel and/or felt when you wrote this is incredible. What a fantastic write! It has been awhile since I have read something with such emotion behind it and I have to say you captured it perfectly! Wow!
One thing I wanted to point out though is you are missing a space between "neverthought" in the ninth line of your piece.
Thank you so much for sharing this! It is nice to know that the words you captured so well exists in this world.
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