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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
While this was a very vivid piece, I feel that it all went by too fast. I felt as if there was somthing missing in the details of her trip home. Also, the "perfect" thing was a bit of a red herring. Perhaps a little of her thoughts as she walked home from school.Everything else was pretty cohesive. The end was not predictable. Good job.

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