You have a good story line. You took the reader to the marina, describe the visual sights, sounds and smells of the marina so we the reader can be transported there. describe your characters so the reader can visualize them at the marina. You give a for instance about Joe, telling the reading about Joe doing work for your main character. This could have had more impact if you had let Joe be a part of the story. Let the reader know, what kind of person Joe was so the reader felt for him. Dialogue between characters is important to draw a reader into the story and make them feel like they are a part of the action happening in the story.
spellbinding...I sometimes have problems keeping up with sci-fi writers not true with your talent for words. You made the story compelling without lossing the reader. Not the easiest thing to do with sci-fi. you drew me into the place so well I could see and smell the bar. I can't wait to read the next chapter to find out what happens.
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