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Review by C M Allen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a great exerpt!! The story line so far is great. Your details are good and I was able to picture the scene easily. You have some ideas here that I have not read before in fantasy such as the "gates" from which the characters are seemingly drawing power from. You are weaving a intricate and intriguing story here.

Cheers!
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Review by C M Allen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Ha ha! This is so cute, I love it!
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Review by C M Allen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the flow of this and it is so catchy and quirky.
Very nice poetry my friend!

Cheers!!
Rissa
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Review by C M Allen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Ida,

This is a well done poem. It moved me greatly. I am not much of a poetry person so I cannot dissect it and give much criticism from a technical standpoint, but I can tell you that I can feel the emotions behind the words and picture a scenario in my mind. I am an only child of a divorced family and although my parents stayed friends and worked together, it still had its hard times. Now that I am a mother, I have a better understanding of what it must be like from a parents perspective and I feel this poem really sheds light on those feelings of loss, heartbreak and guilt.
I really like the 6th and the last stanzas where you talk about her being grown up and understanding because I know that is so true. It just hits home for me.

Thank you for sharing this!

Cheers!
Rissa
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Review by C M Allen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Ha! This is catchy and quirky. I do feel horribly sad for the spider though (sniff).

R.I.P. Mr. Spider,
Rissa
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Review by C M Allen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is so creative and brings a warm smile to my heart.
It really makes sense in the way that butterflies seem to float more than fly, just like snowflakes.

Very enjoyable!
Rissa
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Review by C M Allen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Very strange indeed! You have great detail in this piece and I really love the very first paragraph. I did find the details got to be a little much as I read further and found myself skipping over sentences here and there looking for something significant to happen. The ending was definately a surprise and made me laugh a bit.
Overall I really enjoyed it!

Cheers,
Rissa
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