This is a great exerpt!! The story line so far is great. Your details are good and I was able to picture the scene easily. You have some ideas here that I have not read before in fantasy such as the "gates" from which the characters are seemingly drawing power from. You are weaving a intricate and intriguing story here.
This is so creative and brings a warm smile to my heart.
It really makes sense in the way that butterflies seem to float more than fly, just like snowflakes.
Very strange indeed! You have great detail in this piece and I really love the very first paragraph. I did find the details got to be a little much as I read further and found myself skipping over sentences here and there looking for something significant to happen. The ending was definately a surprise and made me laugh a bit.
Overall I really enjoyed it!
Cheers,
Rissa
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