It is a nice story :) I didn't find mistakes, well one or two.. The story is interesting but I personally think it develops a bit slow, my opinion only.. So it becomes to put it bluntly slightly boring, but the plot is good and nearly flawless..
Maybe shorten it a bit or give it a faster, slightly faster pace. If you do that for me would be an amazing story also i think you are trying a bit to much, using fancy (long, classy, difficult) words.. The best stories are those that can be understood by all but felt by some, i believe that those words should be used for the most critical moments. Please don't get me wrong the better the writers vocabulary the better the story.. But for this piece i felt the need to be simpler by a tone...
Keep writing the story is good
Oh yes we are, we are living in the dark ages..
I like where you are going with this, i liked the idea and I didn't find any mistakes. Even if I did I was too engrossed into reading this that I didn't notice.. Good job again..
It was good :) some little mistakes along the way but the ending was good... Thought you could have written about the way you left him so people can get into it more... And maybe another girl can find similarities in your words and take strength from them :) anyway nice piece
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